sIn the article The Music You Need to Listen to Right Now, the The Ringer Staff (called "The Staff" from now on) make their claims for the best music that everybody and their mother needs to hear. The staff uses passionate diction to show their ample interest in the topic. In the third paragraph, when talking about Charly Bliss, the staff describes her music as "...words [that] create an atmosphere of macabre and unruly girliness..." (Lines 13-14). The amount of interest and love that the staff puts into describing Bliss's songs almost forces you to listen to the them, and make you feel like you will be hated if you do not LOVE them.
Another technique that the staff use really well in this article is their syntax. Even though the staff uses a very simplistic syntax which makes the article a little choppy at times, the choppiness for this type of piece works really well. Since this article is a list of songs and a description of them/why you NEED to listen to them, anything more than a simplistic syntax would throw the whole balance off. Having a sophisticated syntax with em dashes everywhere and (at least) 3 commas in each sentence would make the article overly complicated and turn off any potential readers. The lyrical tone of this article is shown in almost every paragraph throughout the article. In the fourth paragraph, Rich Homie Quan's writing style in his song 'Back to the Basics' is analyzed. "He stretches vowels out flat; he hollows them out and deepens them to better carry his feelings. He bends around the corners of the production, and speeds over its bumps". The entire phrase seems like a section from a corny love movie, or sounds like when somebody over analyzes something that does not need or require analyzing. The purpose of the article is to try and convince the reader to listen (and love) the music that the staff is recommending. The reader feels inclined to at least give the music the staff recommends a listen to because of the way they describe it. The staff gives each of the songs a paragraph of explanation for why you NEED to listen to that specific song, and their arguments are very powerful. The purpose for this article is needed. For as long as I can remember recommending music to my friends, everybody is too stubborn and scared to try something new. This stubbornness leads to those people getting caught in a cycle of listening to the same music over and over again, which will hopefully be broken once they read the reviews for these songs. The staff appeals to pathos in their argument to further convince the reader to listen to the music that they recommended. When talking about Stormyz's 'Gang Signs & Prayer', the staff says that the song "...showcases a gentler Stormyz, one who echoes his mother's wishes in turning to God (and gospel) for redemption". This description gives the song an entire new meaning, and makes the song seem like a story of Stormyz and his life. Overall, the staff's argument is very strong. They use personal experience, as well as appeals to pathos to convince the reader to listen to the music. Although their argument was already strong, the use of outside ratings of the songs would have been a helpful addition to the argument.
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In this article, author Micah Peters uses informal diction, using pronouns such as "you" (line 1) and using profanities through his article, which make Peters seem more credible and honest. He also uses the adjective "dumb" multiple times in the third paragraph, weakening his argument because he sounds uneducated. Peters seems to have a very strong emotional attachment to the topic, making his argument more impactful to his audience.
A skill that Peters could work on later in his writing career is his syntax. In this article, the sentences are very short, nothing is really expanded upon or explained, and he uses commas carelessly, making his argument gradually weaker as the article progresses. Peters attempts to use syntax to appeal to a wider audience, however, his simplistic syntax turns away any potential readers he say have due to the choppiness and lack of knowledge about the topic. The tone of the article is very optimistic. He references the first 'Guardians of the Galaxy' movie multiple times while describing the new movie, and says ""The Chain" are probably going to be perfect. Don't believe me? Here's the latest trailer". His tone of voice in that phrase is very optimistic, and he seems to be anxiously waiting for the new movie to be released. The purpose for this article is to evoke anticipation for the 'Guardians of the Galaxy 2' movie being released in the summer, which is very meaningful for Marvel fans who did not know about a sequel, or did know about the sequel, but did not know the full details about it. Peters uses personal experience and knowledge about past Marvel movies, as well as the 'Guardian of the Galaxy' franchise to hype up the forthcoming movie. Overall, His confusing syntax and informal diction combine to make his argument very weak. |
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